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Dear Kelly,

I know exactly how you feel. My mom was a smoker and I couldn't stand smelling the traces of cigarettes in her breath.

In my view, a direct and honest talk counts most. Firstly, not only did I tell her about my feelings that I was worried about her and family members’ health but also offered my suggestion that she kick her addiction to smoking. Besides, we worked together to find solutions, such as chewing gums, doing exercise and so on. Eventually she quit altogether!

I hope my personal experience will be of some help to you.

Yours,

LiHua

解析

【詳解】第1步：根據(jù)提示可知，假定你是李華。在一個英文網(wǎng)絡(luò)論壇上，你看到名叫Kelly的中學(xué)生發(fā)帖尋求幫助。請根據(jù)帖子的內(nèi)容、寫作要點和要求回帖。寫作要點：1.結(jié)合親身經(jīng)歷告訴 Kelly要怎樣認(rèn)識這個問題；2.給Kelly提出建議。

第2步：根據(jù)寫作要求，確定關(guān)鍵詞（組）：smoker (吸煙者)；stand doing sth.(忍受做某事)；cigarettes(香煙)；in one’s view(在某人看來)；be worried about(擔(dān)心)；offer suggestion(提出建議)；addiction to(成癮)；solutions(解決辦法)；such as(比如)；personal experience(個人經(jīng)歷)等。

第3步：根據(jù)提示及關(guān)鍵詞（組）進行遣詞造句，注意主謂一致和時態(tài)問題。此處文章主要應(yīng)用一般過去時。

第4步：連句成文，注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞進行句子之間的銜接與過渡，書寫一定要規(guī)范清晰，保持整潔美觀的卷面是非常重要的。

【點睛】范文內(nèi)容完整，語言規(guī)范，語篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當(dāng)。作者在范文中使用了較多高級表達(dá)方式，如Firstly, not only did I tell her about my feelings that I was worried about her and family members’ health but also offered my suggestion that she kick her addiction to smoking.運用倒裝句；I hope my personal experience will be of some help to you.be of +抽象名詞的運用。全文中沒有中國式英語的句式，顯示了很高的駕馭英語的能力。另外文章思路清晰、層次分明，上下句轉(zhuǎn)換自然，為文章增色添彩。